User:Sappho Cornelia Catula/Arete/Footballer 28 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sappho Cornelia Catula


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/w/index.php?title=User:Sappho_Cornelia_Catula/Arete&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template&redirect=no


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/ Arete

Evaluate the drafted changes
The lead is well very inclusive so I think you're fine in not having added anything. You may want to consider breaking up some of the knowledge and either moving it to a different section, or explaining it in a more concise way. However, it is a difficult concept, so it is understandable if explaining it more concisely is not really possible.

I liked that you moved your first sentence under "athletics" from where it was to where it is now. I agree that it makes more sense there.

Don't forget to cite, in someway, the quote in the last paragraph under "Homer" by Debra Hawhee.

Is it possible to add any more pictures/media? I understand it's sort of an obscure topic so it may be hard.

I think you have opportunity to make some edits under the "Personification" category. It seems that there are many claims made about Arete as a person without giving a source, so you could try to find where that comes from and cite it. In addition, some of the information may not be completely on topic to Arete and might need to be taken out.

You might also be able to add some content under the "Paideia" section as it is pretty sparse. Now, I understand that it is hard to add content in an area like this where a separate Wiki page exists for this topic as I ran into this problem with my own page. But I think you can probably find some more detail to include. Just a suggestion though.

Overall, I think you have done a nice job with reorganizing some content to make it more clear or broken up more! You also refrain from having any opinionated information or from presenting anything in an argumentative way, which is great! Where I might go next to continue to build on your progress is to add some more content in the above suggested areas or anywhere else you notice that may need some extra detail.