User:Sara8887/Art therapy/Lkshephe Peer Review

General info
Sara8887
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sara8887/Art_therapy?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Art therapy

Evaluate the drafted changes
I think that the changes to the sentence structure to the Lead paragraph was a smart step to take to improve the article. In terms of adding Egypt as part of the list of countries, I think that it a good idea. However, the original article does not expand on each countries involvement and contributions towards art therapy, so if you decide to add Egypt's implementation of art therapy, I suggest you expand on the other countries as well so it is not unevenly informed. If you decide to not expand on Egypt's involvement with art therapy in the History section, you could potentionally mention their Egyptian Autsim Society in the Autism section of the article. You could incorporate the sentences, "These art therapy activities [basket weaving] were part of studies that focused on self esteem and proved that art therapy significantly '...increased inner strength and daily living skills and reduced symptoms of emotional disorders..." into the Autism section. I love how your sources are secondary sources. I think that you have done a great job!