User:Sarahmaemartin/Asian Americans in arts and entertainment/Xawnii Peer Review

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General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Sarahmaemartin
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Sarahmaemartin/Asian Americans in arts and entertainment

Content

 * Content should include more examples of Asian-American entertainers (ie. Sandra Oh, Constance Wu, George Takei, etc.)
 * Parasite section gives information about the movie more than the director or any actors involved.
 * Parasite was not made by Asian-Americans and is considered a foreign film as it was produced by Koreans.
 * Article should include Asian-American entertainers in the music industry.

Tone and Balance

 * Tone is neutral.

Sources and References

 * Sources have too many quotes from actors

Organization

 * Organization is clear
 * "Representation through ..." section works well in dividing people by industries

Overall impressions

 * Should have more examples of entertainers
 * Less use of quotes
 * Organization is good