User:Sarahs02/Sustainability in Dubai/Jimmygotclass Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Sarahs02
 * User:Sarahs02/sandbox

Lead

 * you're adding to an existing article, so I don't think there is a lead that you had to add
 * really fluid incorporation of your work to the existing subheading of the original article

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Relevant, current, content, does not address equity gaps
 * the one suggestion I have is to incorporate more numbers and statistics into your additions, like naming the specific year or decade that economic/population boom occurred, or percentages of how much electricity and water prices have risen by, just to take some of the general points and make them more sophisticated, but this is not necessary; the paraphrasing is already well done as is

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * I did not sense bias in any particular direction

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * All of your links work, and seem current and credible, but your first and third articles are websites/articles, rather than studies...I would check with Professor Tysick to make sure that's okay
 * there is only one or two citations per paragraph that you've written; I would add more citations, especially in your last paragraph, to show that you got the information from a source, because otherwise the implication is that you thought of it on your own

Organization

 * Easy to comprehend and process, I can see exactly under which subheading on the original article that you plan to insert your additions

Images and Media

 * not applicable

Overall impressions

 * Fantastic job overall; you've added a lot and made significant contributions to an underreported topic/barely covered original article! My suggestions are all really small, since you've already done the most important parts!