User:Sarahsgoh/Raquel Sanchez/HMcConne Peer Review

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Evaluate the drafted changes
overall


 * good info box, would love a picture as well!
 * content- really strong
 * tone and balance - good descriptions, don't see evidence of any bias
 * sources and organization - really good, I liked separating out the commitment to diversity as its own section
 * images - Picture of Raquel Sanchez would be great! Like that you have one of the Hutch though

lead:

Very strong lead section; only thing is the first few sentences aren't associated with references yet, should add those in.

early life and edu:

Good details, concise and clear. If she's still continuing to pursue a doctorate though, I would take that out of the infobox.

career :

Have a lot of good details about her career path, would like a little bit more on her work with Dr. Holland - was she in his lab or research group, is that why she also made the move to the Hutch? Only other thing is it seems that Wikipedia generally prefers as many sentences having citations as possible, and you often don't start citing until midway through or at the end of a paragraph - it seems to be fine if the citations are for the same reference, they can be repeated.

Commitment to diversity:

I like having this be its own section, and I think it's very well written.

awards:

I think Billie already mentioned this, but probably going from most recent awards to older helps ensure that people are seeing what her most recent commendations are. Also, this may just be how wikipedia does it, but it seems that the table could be made more streamlined by putting the references with the name of the award.

selected publications - I know you don't have this section, but I added it just because I'm interested if she does have publications; if so, would probably be good to include.

references:

I think if there are a few more references you can track down, that would be great, but what you already have has given you a lot of good information! However, three of the references - all bizjournal ones - say that they're missing or empty, so that should be looked into.