User:Sarai1021/User:Divyareddy11/Erica Scourti/Sarai1021 Peer Review

bib:


 * 1) sentence 2 - instead of "she frequently looks" suggesting an action on behalf the artist imply that "her art suggest" or "her work holds reference too"
 * 2) sent. 3 - is this your opinion? no link/citation to source claim
 * 3) sent. 4 - either remove or reword entirely to support previous sentence or combine with #3
 * 4) sent. 5 - source claim

edu:


 * 1) source? hope this is paraphrasing

art:


 * 1) parapgraph 1 - good but needs citation
 * 2) par. 2 - last sentence of "Life in adwords" could remove "critical" (it is subjective) also a link to the subject of this paragraph would be nice for reference
 * 3) par. 3/4 great research just back it up with sources actually linked not just listed at the bottom - whose to say 1st source wasn't used again for another topic ex. bio & edu

exhibit/collections:


 * 1) link each source potential to be combined per source
 * 2) link museum would be great

* overall sources make for stronger writing in wikipedia - its almost done is essay style which is unnecessarry because you are not proving a claim but presenting nuetral evidence so it would be benficial to remove adjectives

* each sentence should be backed with evidence from a source - there does not have to be a # citation for every single sentence but if two sentences in a row are written with sources in mind then add cite at end of second sentence(each sentence should not be your own creative writing unless you are defining jargin and even then it is best to link another wiki page going over whatever you are explaining or simply to the word when included in a sentence already since wiki gives the option)

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