User:Sarang04/Body positivity/Fishst1xsx Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(Sarang04)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sarang04/Body_positivity?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Body positivity
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists): Body positivity

Evaluate the drafted changes
The edits provided by Sarang04 were to make the history section of their article overall more cohesive and fill in some of the missing edits. I noticed for that original missing sources needed, they deleted that information and replaced it with something else. I personally would have not deleted the information but since they did provide a source in the end it does still complete the goal of educating people on the topic in an academic way. Overall it was well written and i was not able to detect bias. I felt that the information was up to date which that given, I wish an edit was made to provide an image about these moments/eras and feel that it would be beneficial to the readers. I do think that perhaps there needs to be new section to talk about the intersection of POC and LBGTQ+ role in the Body Positive movement, as well as a section on the role social media has had on mass producing body positive content, and finally a section for the intersection of men in the body positive movement. I think this wikipage overall needs more information and talks about it very generally but needs to be more detailed on specific groups.