User:Sarang04/Body positivity/Lilyparks Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sarang04


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sarang04/Body positivity


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Body positivity

Evaluate the drafted changes
Sarang04 did a great job with their edits on the body positivity article. I noticed that they changed some of the content and citations. The original article expressed how there were too many headings and how the scope of other articles was duplicated. I specifically saw how sarang04 changed this relating to the fat acceptance movement section. The content that was added is well written and clear and also seems neutral. One thing that I believe could be further edited is the heading aspect. There are still many headings in the article that could potentially be made more concise. But overall, the layout and writing on their edits are great!