User:Savanna.deer/Euphyllia ancora/Olivia.gehrke Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Savanna.deer


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Savanna.deer/Euphyllia_ancora?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Euphyllia ancora

Evaluate the drafted changes
- It would be helpful to include some pictures of the development you are talking about so that the readers don't find your description of it confusing to follow. A step by step developmental diagram would work perfectly. Otherwise, I think that you include a lot of really good detail in your developmental paragraph.

- As you move forward with writing the other sections that you are going to add, I would use the citing tool when referencing and adding the articles into your paragraphs as it will make your writing much neater and allow the readers to easily access the links to your cited sources if they want more information.

- I would try to include the paragraphs already in the article with what you are writing in your sandbox as it will be much easier for you to build off of the information already there. It will also help make sure that the article flows together nicely so there is no confusion.

- In your reproduction paragraph, i would try to find a picture of their reproductive process or provide a definition of gonochoristic since a lot of people are unfamiliar with that word and don't know what it means.

- Try to find a map that shows their distribution so that your readers will get a better understanding of where they are located.

- As stated before, try to include your distribution and description sections into the sections already written in the article so they will flow nicely together.