User:Savannahmaria/Education for refugees, migrants and internally displaced persons/HannahLH Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Savannahmaria


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Savannahmaria/Education_for_refugees,_migrants_and_internally_displaced_persons?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Education for refugees, migrants and internally displaced persons

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Hi Savannah! Your article is SUPER good! Feel free to email me if you have any questions about what I wrote. Here's my peer review:


 * I think your use of the quote in your first paragraph in "Background" is great!
 * Maybe your second paragraph in "Comprehensive Needs" could use a citation?
 * In the last sentence of your intro paragraph for "Educational improvements" it's not clear who "they" are. Is it everyone in the survey?  Just the 15% who reported being illiterate?  Maybe you could add something after "least likely" like "least likely out of..." or just say who.
 * Overall, you nailed the encyclopedic voice! All info is delivered in an unbiased and concise way.  Awesome job!
 * I also appreciated how you separated comprehensive and academic needs!
 * Super duper AWESOME job this is fab!