User:SaveTheTrees365/Climate Gentrification/Elizabethwatson121 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

(SaveTheTrees365/Climate)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SaveTheTrees365/Climate_Gentrification?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Intro + History:


 * I like how it starts off with an Introduction and History to set the context and background
 * I think you gave a great introduction and history of gentrification
 * This article has a great layout, moving logically from Intro + History, Causes, Effects, gives an example from a case study, and provides solutions

Causes:


 * I think you could break down each cause and organize it by the type of the cause and then from there explain the causes themselves
 * For example, I think you should split them up the paragraphs into economic, cultural, and environmental factors and then from there explain your reasoning

Effects:


 * I think in the Effects Section you could separate it into the the different types of effects (i.e environmental, socio-economic, social-emotional) and link them more to the causes you mentioned above
 * I think you could maybe even organize this paper by introducing the cause and the effects directly after each other

Case Study:


 * In the Case Study section it sounds a little repetitive, maybe you could relate the the case studies more to each other
 * I really like your use of case studies to convey this information, I think it is a very effective way to provide examples

Solutions:


 * I like that you added a solutions section but maybe you could be more clear on the specific problems these solutions are seeking to address


 * I think you could break up the paragraphs in the Solutions section so that it is clearer to see which solution is where


 * I think you could maybe make the conclusion more comprehensive so that it ties the whole page together