User:SaveTheTrees365/Climate Gentrification/Mpusic Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SaveTheTrees365


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:SaveTheTrees365/Climate Gentrification
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead:

- The first paragraph provides a good summary of what climate gentrification is!

- It is concise - good length for a lead

- You could add a brief description of the article's major sections

Content:

- Great job of addressing the impact on marginalized communities

- I am a little confused about the difference is between direct and indirect displacement

- There were a few sentences that I think could be reworded to be a bit easier to understand:"As high income households move out of coastal areas, the lurking issues of the climate crisis are pushing people inward"; " Ultimately, it has been proven that natural disasters have paved the way for climate gentrifications but other factors also contribute."

- I think you could expand on the last paragraph of the causes section to elaborate on the other factors that contribute to climate gentrification

- You could expand on the effects section - I would specifically be interested to know more about the cultural disruption you mentioned in the first paragraph

- Great use of statistics

- I really appreciated all the examples you provided (i.e Katrina, Little Haiti)!

- The content is up to date!

- The solutions section is very strong!

- I don't think a conclusion section is necessary - you can add this information throughout the other sections of your article

Organization:

- Well-organized, broken down into major topics of the article

- Easy to read/understand

Tone and Balance:

- Good tone - formal but not biased!

- In the solutions section you could touch on the downsides to the proposed solutions to make it more balanced

Sources and References:

- Good use of relevant and reliable peer-reviewed academic research

- The links provided all work!

- The causes section could probably use another peer-reviewed sources (maybe at the end of the first/second paragraph?)

- Only use one source in the solutions sections - it may be helpful to have a few more!

Overall Impressions:

- Great work, this was a super interested topic to read about!