User:Savrit/Hemiscyllium/NyunN Peer Review

Article: Hemiscyllium by User: Savrit;

Review by NyunN

Very interesting and informative article on an equally interesting subject. I enjoyed reading what you have written so far, and I know you probably still have a bit of a ways to go since we are not at the end of this project yet, but these are my suggestions so far.


 * This is an existing article, so I believe you did not write the first paragraphs that are not bolded, correct? I would suggest adding a bit to the introduction/lead so that it makes the rest of your article stronger. The introduction seems to only describe the appearance of the Hemiscyllium which is fine, but since you go on to talk about their evolution and habitat, perhaps you can make small mentions or references to that in the introduction. Doing this will give the reader an idea of what other information they will find in the body of the article.
 * The lead/overview briefly mention the history of how this new genus of sharks was discovered; it is very brief. Perhaps you can find more information and expand this to another section in the body for more detail.
 * In your body I really enjoyed reading the coverage you added explaining why this genus is known as "walking sharks", by describing how it is that they actually 'walk'. Your sources for this section look good. When you write about how these sharks have evolved to have an advantage to climate change factors, you do describe what some of these advantages are and that's great. If possible, I would suggest you add more detail about these advantages, and write about a specific example? It is really interesting to read about and personally I'd love to know more, so I think other readers coming across your article would want to know more as well.
 * When switching over to describing the habitat of the sharks, it might look more organized if you give that section its own subheading, so the jump doesn't seem as abrupt. I think you could also separate the details about how the shark hunts and make that its own section, and this would allow you to add a few more details about what the habitat itself is like.
 * I would suggest adding examples/names of what some of the prey and predators are for these sharks. Since you go into detail about how the shark's physical appearance relates to their hunting and survival habits, this would be a good opportunity to make a small addition in the lead paragraph somewhere about that, that way the reader knows that when they read further into the article they will learn more details about the shark's physical traits.

Overall your article looks great so far! The tone is very neutral, and your sources seem to be strong ones. I am interested to find out what else you add to your article.