User:Sbah99/Eugenics in California/Amandarychtik Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sbah99


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sbah99/Eugenics in California


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Eugenics in California

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

- It looks like there was nothing added into the sandbox but one thing that I noticed that could be improved on in the article is the lead. The lead doesn't inform the reader of what eugenics is and why it may be important to them, and why they would want to read the article. I think rearranging the lead will start the article off with a better understanding of what you're writing about.