User:Sbondurant/Bernice Eddy/Joz27 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sbondurant


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sbondurant/Bernice Eddy


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Bernice Eddy

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

1) Your Education section reads more like an Early life section just because you are talking about birth, parents, and family.

2) Make sure you are using Bernice Eddy's full name the first time it is used in each section.

3) Make sure to state who the NIH are before abbreviating.

4) You have Leprosy research under Early Studies, but these studies look like they took place after, or during, her time at the NIH. This is a little confusing and I suggest reorganizing this section.

5) What year was the Polyomavirus research?

6) I would suggest hyperlinking the SV40 Wikipedia page in your SV40 Virus Research section.