User:Sbonesan/Democracy in America/Jobananas Peer Review

I reviewed the actual “Democracy in America” wikipedia page because I couldn’t find your article draft in your sandbox when I was writing this. The main strength of the article is that it appeared to be fairly complete as I couldn’t find any glaring omissions from anything covered the text. One issue, however, is that it appears like a lot of citations are missing, particularly where the authors of the Wikipedia article have presented what could be original conclusions (see the ‘Summary’ section: “Tocqueville also outlines the possible excesses of passion for equality among men, foreshadowing the totalitarian states of the twentieth century”) or where the article appears to have been formatted weirdly (see the entirety of the ‘Volume I’ and ‘Volume II’ sections). This means that the citations and format of the article will likely need to be addressed for general Wikipedia audiences to be able to effectively read and use the article. There are a few claims in the ‘Impact’ section that are both unconnected to the other sections of the article and require citations to be effective (ex: “although he himself believed that an industrial aristocracy would differ from the formal aristocracy of the past”).