User:Schanpong/Weapon (biology)/FatimahB Peer Review

General info
Schanpong
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Sarah's Weapon (biology)
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Weapon (biology)

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: I think Sarah does a great job of redefining weapons in biology and overall provides a more inclusive definition (the original article implies only males have weapons). The only critique I have is to possibly add more to the lead. An example of what can be added is an introduction sentence to the Darwin section that is later in the article.

Content: The Competition section is very well cited. I would suggest adding a definition for "agonistic behaviors." I think the Selection section is a great start! I suggest adding an example or two of how selection specifically acts sexually. I think the female-female competition should be its own section and discussed more in depth.

Tone and Balance: Great job on keeping a neutral tone! I think some of the wording is a bit awkward at times, but otherwise, great writing.

Sources and References: I think your citations are perfect!

Organization: I think this is well organized, but as mentioned above, I suggest adding a female-female competition section or a female example of weaponry section.

Overall: Great start, but definitely needs a little more development and content depth.