User:Schug068/U.S. Women's National Soccer Team pay discrimination claim/Wentl015 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Schug068, Cjones1015


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Schug068/U.S._Women's_National_Soccer_Team_pay_discrimination_claim?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * U.S. women's national soccer team pay discrimination claim

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

I think your revised lead is good. However, your "background" section does not have any sources cited and therefore does not seem to be verifiable. Do you have any sources to back up the information you presented in this section?

There are some grammatical and spelling errors in your article. There are several instances throughout the article in which there are grammatical errors regarding the tense of verbs in sentences not matching. For example: "The women fought back by wearing their jerseys inside out during warmups before games, so they do not display the team crest." The first part of the sentence uses past tense, while the second half of the sentence uses present tense. Additionally, the following sentence in your "history section" should be reworded as it is not clear or grammatically correct: "The women believed they made 40% of the male players' earnings, and they also have worse conditions than the men go through."

I think there is a typo in the last sentence in the "pop culture" section. I'm guessing it should say "gain the equal benefits" not "gin the equal...".

Your sources appear to be relevant and current. Overall the content of your article is good. You just need to review it and correct some grammar issues. Otherwise, good job.