User:ScoobyDoo78263/Mining/ChloejWard Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

ScoobyDoo78263


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:ScoobyDoo78263/Mining?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Mining

Lead
The lead was copied from the pre-existing article on Mining into the users sandbox with the only change being the removal of one sentence. I suggest an explanation of Ore is added before examples are given. I believe the pre existing lead is is concise and clear. I understand why the user did not make too many changes as the article itself is very in-depth.


 * The lead does not introduce all the following sections (in the main article) - perhaps could add this to the existing lead

Content
The user added a paragraph to the Techniques section of the pre-existing mining article on explosives.


 * The content seems relevant as the existing article does not include a section on explosive use in mining
 * The user states explosives are used as a mining technique but details on how the process is done could be added
 * statistics

Tone and Balance

 * The content added does not seem to promote any bias as only facts are stated and referenced so there does not seem to be a specific viewpoint expressed.
 * The section could benefit from an expansion on both pros and cons of using explosions as a technique as it currently does not include that.

Organization

 * I believe this content can be added as a subsection under techniques instead of a single paragraph
 * The writing itself is a bit choppy. Several very good points are introduced but without much flow. I think this could be changed by expanding further.
 * Instead of summed up in one paragraph, include separate paragraphs for an explanation of how explosives are used in mining, why they became popular, the most common explosives used, drawbacks to this technique, what has further developed in response to those drawbacks.

Overall Impression

 * I think the content added is necessary but needs to be expanded on in depth
 * There is no in depth section in the existing article on the use of explosives in mining, so creating that section was a smart addition.
 * The content needs to be expand upon. Essentially it states explosives are used as a technique and that it poses a safety threat. I think it would benefit to expand specifically how explosives are used, and why they are effective / the benefit, and then expand into cons as well. Mention the time frame it became popular or if it was ever the main method and then mention when you decreased and why (if it did).