User:Scorpio1028/Birthday Letters/Hmf58 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Scorpio1028


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Scorpio1028/Birthday_Letters?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Birthday Letters

Evaluate the drafted changes
This was a super cool draft! I really enjoyed reading/learning about Ted Hughes. For my peer review, I’ll section out changes I think would be great in an organized list form. Here it is:

LEAD:

This lead is pretty solid. I like that it’s condensed and gives specific examples/information. Awesome! However, I have a few ideas that I think will allow you to expand and also give the rest of the article a clear framework. To begin, I think some background context/information could really add to this lead. What was the time period like in reference to Hughes’ location? This will help shape the meaning of the poem without making your writing interpretive. Maybe you could also add some more about the poetry collection itself? Lastly, I think you need to make sure that you mention something related to the controversy in the lead. Everything that you want in the body of the article should be referenced in some way in the lead. Let me know if that makes sense! Otherwise I really like the direction this is headed in.

BACKGROUND:

I covered most of this in my review of the lead, but I think adding some stuff from the background into the lead would help contextualize the article. For the background section, make sure you have enough sources to back up what you’re saying. As of right now, I only see one source at the end. I think if you have an array of sources, this will make it even stronger.

CONTROVERSY:

I think that this is a really good section!! It is really well organized and it doesn’t come across as opinionated at all which is super impressive for a section that discusses something that can often present itself as something subjective. REALLY good work!

NOTABLE POEMS:

I think if you were able to find more poems for this section it would add to the section greatly. Otherwise, I would just remove the section entirely and figure out a way to incorporate “The Blue Flannel Suit” into your lead or background.

REFERENCES:

You’re on the right track! I think some more references would really help bring this article together. However, this is really great work in general. I’m genuinely interested in your writing. Awesome work!