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"Cleaner Production" Page Proposal
This proposal is how I plan to contribute to the start-class article “Cleaner Production”. The significance is that these initiatives are a proactive way for industries and governments to head towards sustainability.

Critiquing the article based on information and discussion of the topic, there isn’t much covered. This page doesn’t have any subcategories except for the refences and external links. Without clearly organizing primary information such as the lead section, background, significance, or application, it already looks inferior to an example Wikipedia page. While it does briefly cover information that should be arranged into these categories, in-line citations are another issue, having one in-line citation listed. It does have five other scholarly sources listed in the bibliography, yet they are not specified where their information is cited and six scholarly sources is insufficient to classify as a finished page.

Reading like a lead section, the first paragraph provides an introductory definition to cleaner production, but should have more information. For example, acknowledging the role of industries, government, and the media on environmental initiatives could improve it.

Providing a background, the next paragraph describes the United Nations involvement in the development of the concept, but remains vague. It doesn’t state the year the concept was developed but states that it was where discussed. The information on this page is insufficient for a reader to fully grasp this concept. In addition, this paragraph has no in-line citations yet refers to several UN organizations, a quote, and other unspecified facts.

The next set of information is a list of cleaner production options. The structure needs to be edited. For example, I think Cleaner production initiatives could be its own subheading. Then each example will be organized apart for their own specific description. This structure will flow better with the overall organization of the page. Each cleaner production initiative can be defined, its significance stated, and can reference an example of where and how it is implemented. Adding this information will allow to page to go more in depth and give a better understanding for the reader. There are several other facts of countries where these types of initiatives have started to be implemented but both have no in-line citations.

It is important that this page has linked “see also” topics that relate to cleaner production, all of which are based on Wikipedia covering environmental topics. It will be important to add more relevant topics to this list. The reference section is quite brief for this page, with 6 scholarly sources in the bibliography. My edit will find much more scholarly sources and have proper in-line citations for a richer and broader description of the topic. The last heading of this page is “external links”. These sources are scholarly but aren’t properly integrated into the page.

Overall, this page has insufficient information about cleaner production. The organization needs to changed and much information needs to be covered on these initiatives. What is written so far is unbiased and neutral. For specific examples relating to the concept, pictures and diagrams will be important to integrate into the page as there are none currently.

I will highlight potential sources of information that can be used to edit and improve to this page. Relating to comparative public policy course topics, this edited page will consider theoretical and practical concepts of how cleaner production can be implemented. It will be important to highlight several key examples across countries for the common methods, reflecting an understanding of comparative politics, and how policies and regulations of a countries’ specific environmental initiatives have similarities or differences. In addition, how the concept of cleaner production is perceived by industries, government, and the media will be an important aspect of my edit, and I plan to consider course topics such as policy transfer and agenda setting as they are important factors.

As listed in the annotated bibliography, potential sources of information address specific examples of how cleaner production has been implemented, and how it can improve. In addition, other potential sources of information foster discussions on long-term strategies to further social, pollical, economic, and environmental sustainability. all aspects that cleaner production addresses.