User:Scwoopy07/Hippodamia (mythology)/NorthGoose Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

User:Scwoopy07


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * Hippodamia (daughter of Oenomaus)


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * I was unable to find the sandbox version of this article. So I compared your edits with the previous version in the article's history.

Evaluate the drafted changes
It looks like you are working on the article Hippodamia (daughter of Oenomaus) and not Hippodamia (mythology), so that is what I am reviewing.

Lead

The additional information you added to the lead works very well. Especially considering the article is about the daughter of Oenomaus specifically, so it is important to make this clarification up front. You are missing a description of one main section, Hippodamia in Ancient Olympia, but otherwise the other main sections of the article are covered. The introduction sentence works well and the lead is concise and contains the correct amount of information discussed in the article.

Content

The added content is relevant to the topic and does not appear to be misinformed or outdated. I appreciated the changes made to the last paragraph of the Mythology section, as the previous edits by other contributors were not phrased in a way that felt appropriate to Wikipedia's guidelines; good job there! I am not sure that I would list Hippodamia's children in a vertical orientation, as you have and might consider changing that to save on visual space.

Tone and Balance

Content is neutral and without biases. I did not feel swayed to one perspective or another considering the topic, and all information seems to be presented holistically and openly.

Sources

I can see that you have added some more current sources, and would definitely advise you to continue with this. Are there any peer reviewed works that can provide more information for the article? Perhaps another section could be written with more research? Otherwise, the sources you've added seem thorough and updated compared to the ones used previously.

Organization

Overall, this article is mostly well organized. My only critique is to consider how effective the use of lists are in illustrating Hippodamia's relations and suitors. This takes up a large amount of visual space and if there is a way to re-organize it I would suggest to do that. I didn't notice any other major errors otherwise.

Images

I think moving the image to further in the article makes sense considering the context of the image. I would suggest finding an additional image to replace the one that was at the top of the article to provide more visual information. Additionally, if you have the skillset a family tree would be very helpful in the Family section.

Overall, this article looks great and I can't wait to see where you go with it! Keep up the good work!