User:Sdolphin02/Paradise/Shakera Patterson Peer Review

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I enjoyed reading about how paradise is depicted in the Quran and how paradise is incorporated into some of the buildings that we read about in class.

You have a lot of sources to support your writing. A lot of them are academic sources from the University of Pennsylvania press.

My advice would be to expand upon how paradise is depicted in each of the structures that you wrote about. For the Taj Mahal, you could've gone into more details about the how the building overlooks the water, the greenery, the symmetrics, the quantic inscriptions, the significance of the vegetations used in the design. All these are important symbolisms of paradise that you didn't write about. Consider this and use it to expand on the other buildings.