User:SealSquared/Civic technology/Gobears18 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

SealSquared


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:SealSquared/Civic_technology?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Civic technology

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

The content is all up to date adding content about countries that previously had little or no information. All content added is written in a neutral tone simply stating what the civic technology company is and what they do within the specific country. All sentences within the draft are supported by articles. However, the majority of the sources detailing the civic technology companies come from the website of the country the writer is speaking about. Overall, the content has improved the quality of the article as there were gaps in information about civic technology in certain Southern American countries and effectively provides examples. The main advice I could provide would be to use sources from websites other than the topic and to switch up transitions as the word "also" is used in the majority of your transitions.

Reply
Thank you for the feedback. This has been very useful. I will change up the vocabulary on "also". I will make sure to search more articles talking about the platforms.