User:Sealbillo/Western Sahara Conflict/Imwesley Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? I will be reviewing sealbillo's article
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: User:Sealbillo/sandbox

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * There is no lead for the article link he provided on the wiki edu but a very thorough one in this one which he may have been referencing. Western Sahara conflict
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Yes, it clearly describes the subsection that he had decided to elaborate upon.
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * This concisely summarizes what the section will be discussing
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * As a further elaboration of the subsection it further enhances the subsection.
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?
 * The lead is very well made and captures the overview of what will be discussed in the section.

Lead evaluation

 * Overall an outstanding and efficient lead for the section he wishes to elaborate upon.

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * The content provides further examples and evidence in regards the the human rights violations that were broadly covered in the original article
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * It is very much up to date by referencing sources from 2019.
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * Personally, I do not know if he is completely deleting the original articles section or adding below it. If he is adding to the subsection, I was just curious of if 2019 is the only moment that had this type of human rights violations during this ongoing conflict between these two entities.

Content evaluation

 * The content encompassing the human rights investigations on the media blackout against the protesters and journalists was phenomenal and very well written. I am just curious however if that was the only issue that he wanted to elaborate upon or if he was going to encompass the entirety of all human rights violations for this article.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * The content that was added was very neutral and unbiased
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * There were not and all had evidence of the claims made by the Human Rights Watch and what had transpired of these events.
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * The viewpoints provide the perfect amount of representation in regards to the topic about what happened in 2019.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * It does not do so in any way, shape, or form.
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * It does not do so in any way, shape, or form.
 * It does not do so in any way, shape, or form.

Tone and balance evaluation

 * This is a well written, unbiased and information stated section that clearly portrays the topic without opinions.



Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * I believe that they are, especially with the first citation that he has listed
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Based on the few links I have checked. These sources seem to be very credible and reliable references to justify the stance made in his sandbox.
 * Are the sources current?
 * The links are very current and focused on a single event
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes they do work.
 * Check a few links. Do they work?
 * Yes they do work.
 * Yes they do work.

Sources and references evaluation

 * He has a diversity of sources for the events in regards to the the media on protesters and journalists during 2019



Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * One of the best articles I have read thus far with its clear, and concise structure/ organizations
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * I did not notice any notable grammatical/ spelling errors but it doesn't hurt to reread it again.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * It was well organized and broken down between the targeting of protesters and journalists.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * It was well organized and broken down between the targeting of protesters and journalists.

Organization evaluation

 * It was well organized and broken down in the section.

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * The content has improved the overall quality of the human rights section of the article but was not entirely sure if his focus was to focus on 2019 onwards or human rights overall/
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * A well written and through article that provided very well insight in regards to the investigations of the Moroccan government in 2019
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * I hope that he would provide clarity if his focus is on the government's overall violations of media blackout throughout this conflict or restructuring the section by categorizing it as 2019 under human rights
 * How can the content added be improved?
 * I hope that he would provide clarity if his focus is on the government's overall violations of media blackout throughout this conflict or restructuring the section by categorizing it as 2019 under human rights

Overall evaluation

 * This was definitely one of the most interesting subsections I have gotten the opportunity to read and thoroughly enjoyed it. Although it is a personal preference, I wished there were some more use for the first source cited as well as 3, 5 and 6 throughout his subsection. But overall, a very well made and written addition the the well written article about the Western Sahara Conflict.