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Article evaluation Article: 'Gun Control'

1. I thought everything in the article was relevant to the topic; as the topic is very broad ('Gun Control'), all content was somehow related to it. 2. The article appears to be very neutral. Although more discussion happens about the policies of the U.S., I believe that makes sense given it is the country with the most gun control issues. 3. Although the article tries to cover all three major countries with gun control history (U.S., Canada and Australia), the article spends the most time on the geography of the U.S. and less time on Australia. 4.& 5. Yes, the links work and they have the necessary information. However, some sources are questionable. For instance, one evidence point was based on an article from "The Atlantic," which can be viewed as a highly liberal newsletter. This can potentially be used to cite a more left-oriented opinion, causing bias in the article. 6. Some information is based on information from 2004, which can be seen as outdated for current events. Such information can be updated to reflect a contemporary evidence point. 7. There is debate as to whether specific facts and figures are relevant in the article. For instance, there is disagreement as to cite "the number of guns in circulation in the U.S." as to making an argument that gun control is difficult to manage. 8. Yes, this article is part of WikiProject Firearms, Military History and Politics / Gun Politics. 9. In class, our group discussed the more "movement" element of the gun control topic. In contrast, this article focuses more on the facts and actual policies revolving around this topic.

https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Talk:Gun_control#Citations_--_The_Atlantic Three Articles and Ways to Improve: 1. Deforestation of the Amazon Rain-forest (link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Deforestation_of_the_Amazon_rainforest) From the guest speaker in class, we learned about the efforts of various NGOs who work towards using social media as a tool to deter major corporations from making more projects in the Amazon for the purposes of oil and petroleum extraction. The article as a small section on "Impact to the Indigenous People," but lacks a lot of content related to these efforts by the NGOs. As such, an improvement would be adding content to better these existing efforts and new projects made by oil companies. 2. Social Movement (link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Social_movement) From another guest speaker in class, we learned about how data can be incorporated in any social movement to help not only identify its successes and limitations, but also find ways to boost certain aspects of the movement itself such as funding or actionable tasks. I think incorporating a section on data-related approach to social media might be a meaningful improvement to the article, which currently has no information on such topic. 3. Uber (link: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Uber) I read about the #deleteuber social movement on the MoveMe website made by former students, which gained a lot of traction in previous years. I noticed that there are no specific articles relevant to the topic but that there is a small section on the Uber wikipedia page. Perhaps, adding content to bolster this section, or creating an entirely new section might add value to the article.

 First Draft of Article (Improvement of Article "March For Our Lives," adding onto the Social Media Section, which is mostly empty 

Originally, protest happened for multiple shootings across the nation, such as for the Charleston Shooting, but never reached past hundreds. With social media, more information was relayed to a larger audience in quicker time, giving more people awareness of what was happening across the nation. (1) By National Walkout Day on April 20, 2018, the social medias had followings over 1.3 million people and in Washington D.C. alone, 200,000 people attended the March For Our Lives protest, whom many younger adults attributed to the big social media presence. (2) The hashtag #MarchForOurLives was used 3.6 million times, and over 7.5 thousand tweets were directed at the NRA social media account.

 Twitter 

The March For Our Lives Twitter started in February of 2018, with the Twitter handle, @AMarch4OurLives. Up to date, the Twitter account has 450,000 followers and are a student-run organization with a large social media presence. (3) The March For Our Lives Twitter has real time, up to date tweets about the movement. It includes tweets about the red flag bill being signed in from other March For Our Lives accounts based in different locations, such as NYC. (4) In addition, the March For Our Lives Twitter account also alerts their followers about the events that are happening, such as meetings at Town Halls or when certain protests are happening. (5) All of their posts follow certain guidelines and relevance, and they also continue to retweet their own tweets too.

 Instagram 

Celebrities and politicians have traditionally dominated policy discussion on social media. Selena Gomez, in March 2018 shared the march's hashtag #MarchForOurLives with the message: "Protect kids, not guns! and this post had received 2 millions likes.[1] Lady Gaga also documented the march releasing a series of Instagram videos calling for action from politicians to enforce stricter gun laws.[2] The march has drawn support from Taylor Swift, Miley Cyrus, Kim Kardashian, Ariana Grande, and their pledging to join and perform at the march.[3]

But following the Stoneman Douglas High School shooting, the students who survived and millions of students worldwide participated in March for Our Lives, emerging as more and more influential on Instagram and Twitter than celebrities on the gun control.[4] One of the tools they used was the hashtags. Top hashtag such as #MarchForOurLives #NeverAgain, #GunControlNow, and #EnoughIsEnough are used to spread out the word and call on public’s attention. [5] Besides, students collaborate with BBH L.A to create first Instagram coloring book. BBH L.A. executive creative director Zach Hilder said “We wanted to give them tools to elevate their voices, create a way to unify their message and allow everyone to participate in the march. That’s the inspiration for Color For Our Lives.”

Dr. Anatoliy Gruzd, James Lannigan, and Dr. Kevin Quigley in their study analyzed the cross-platform communication performed in civic organization, "‘informal’ narrative platform that promoted a clicktivist type of responses from the audience, whereas Twitter was a more ‘formal’ news platform that supported greater two-way communication between the organization and the audience". [6] #MarchforOurLives hashtag ignited much-needed America’s gun conversation, where people protesting against the epidemic of gun violence and the country needs to change.[7]

 Facebook 

The March For Our Lives movement employs Facebook as another social media platform to spread awareness of its campaigns and messages to people around the world. As of March 5th 2019, the MFOL Facebook page has garnered more than 300,000 followers.[1] The page is mainly used to provide updates on national policies regarding gun laws, as well as coverage of various politicians who advocate for more gun safety. Similar to other media platforms, the Facebook page frequently employs popular hashtags such as #MarchForOurLives and #NeverAgain in its posts. Although other social media platforms such as Twitter and Instagram often make posts to increase awareness, Facebook is more often used to organize people in nearby marches or demonstrations.[2]

 Snapchat 

The March For Our Lives movement leveraged Snapchat to gain momentum, spread the word and draw attention to what students and supporters were doing around the United States in response to recent shootings on school campuses. Unique from other social media platforms, Snapchat contains a map feature that allowed the world to see when and where activities by its users is taking place. This allowed the student walkouts to be easily tracked around the US.[1] Video shows thousands of students and supporters walking the streets, protesting gun violence and current gun laws. [2] Snapchat created a "March For Our Lives" Sticker that could be used by the platform's users to document the walkouts around the US.

 All Sources Used:  (1) Crimson Hexagon. “March for Our Lives Was Born on Social Media.” Crimson Hexagon, www.crimsonhexagon.com/blog/march-for-our-lives-was-born-on-social-media/. (2) CBS News. “How Many People Attended March for Our Lives? Crowd in D.C. Estimated at 200,000.” CBS News, CBS Interactive, 25 Mar. 2018, www.cbsnews.com/news/march-for-our-lives-crowd-size-estimated-200000-people-attended-d-c-march/. (3) Account, March For Our LivesVerified. “March For Our Lives (@AMarch4OurLives).” Twitter, Twitter, 27 Feb. 2019, twitter.com/AMarch4OurLives?ref_src=twsrc%5Egoogle%7Ctwcamp%5Eserp%7Ctwgr%5Eauthor. (4) Manhattan, March For Our Lives. “Red Flag Bill Signed Today in NYC ! Step in the Right Direction in Preventing Gun Violence and Saving Lives ✌🏽 Pic.twitter.com/u5AgirRnlR.” Twitter, Twitter, 25 Feb. 2019, twitter.com/mfolmanhattan/status/1100129636774752256. (5) Lives, March For Our. “CHARLESTON, SC: Join Us on Saturday at 3 PM for a Gun Safety Town Hall with @GiffordsCourage, @Townhallproject, and @LeviStraussCo.Let's Talk Background Checks. #HR8 RSVP Here” Twitter, Twitter, 21 Feb. 2019, twitter.com/AMarch4OurLives/status/1098619466307588096. ^ "Selena Gomez Supports March for Our Lives on Instagram: 'Protect Kids, Not Guns!'". Billboard. Retrieved 2019-03-05. ^ "This Is What Social Media Had to Say About the March for Our Lives". Vogue. Retrieved 2019-03-05. ^ Amatulli, Jenna (2018-03-24). "Celebrities Take To The Streets, Social Media For March For Our Lives". Huffington Post. Retrieved 2019-03-05. ^ Bourbon, Julie; Stockman, Dan; Roewe, Brian; Benevento, Maria (2018-04-06). "March for Our Lives: Student-led demonstrations nationwide call for action on gun violence". National Catholic Reporter. 54 (13): 5–6. ^ Hexagon, Crimson. "March for Our Lives was Born on Social Media". www.crimsonhexagon.com. Retrieved 2019-03-05. ^ "ScienceDirect". www.sciencedirect.com. Retrieved 2019-03-05. ^ "This Is What Social Media Had to Say About the March for Our Lives". Vogue. Retrieved 2019-03-05. ^ Millstein, Seth. "These Are The March For Our Lives Hashtags To Use On The Day Of The Protest". Bustle. Retrieved 2019-03-05. https://www.facebook.com/marchforourlives/ https://www.thecut.com/2018/03/march-for-our-lives-for-gun-control-will-be-on-march-24.html [3] Bhardwaj, Prachi. (14 Mar. 2018), "Snapchat's Maps feature visualized the national student walkouts against gun violence in a stunning way". Business Insider. Retrieved 2019-03-05 "SnapChat video at March for our Lives". KSDK. Retrieved 2019-03-04. Author: Sweet Tea and Small Talk: Published on Mar 27, 2018 "https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=O3pJmqGPi5w" "Snapchat shows March For Our Lives through eyes of students". KSDK. Retrieved 2019-03-04. Wargo, Jon M. (2015/00/00). "Spatial Stories with Nomadic Narrators: Affect, Snapchat, and Feeling Embodiment in Youth Mobile Composing". Journal of Language and Literacy Education. 11 (1): 47–64. ISSN 1559-9035. Paolini, Allison. "School Shootings and Student Mental Health: Role of the School Counselor in Mitigating Violence" (PDF). American Counseling Association.

Nicole's Peer Review
I think it would be better to replace "social medias" to "social media platforms". Also, add a comma before "...and in Washington D.C. alone" as these are two different parts of the sentence. As for the 3.6 million use of the hashtag, is it for across all platforms? Was the full title of the NRA identified earlier in the article?

For the following sections, is there a reason for this particular order?

Twitter
After mentioning that tweets from other March For Our Lives accounts based in different locations, it would be nice to have an example of more than just one to really show that there are multiple other cities.

Instagram
When you said that celebrities and politicians have traditionally dominated policy discussion, was it meant to be in general or specific to Instagram? Only clarifying because if it is in general, I'm not sure it should be in this section. I think it's okay to start with Selena Gomez. Also, might be good to redirect the names of the celebrities to their respective wiki pages. In the second paragraph, might be a good idea to change the first word of the sentence from but to something else. May be able to just omit the word. "#MarchforOurLives hashtag ignited much-needed America’s gun conversation, where people protesting against the epidemic of gun violence and the country needs to change..." this seems out of place as it isn't specific to Instagram.

Snapchat
How was Snapchat used to gain momentum?

Sean's Response to Nicole's Peer Review
Thanks for your peer review Nicole! We will make the changes with the word choice and grammar as you mentioned. I think the 3.6mm use of the hashtag refers to just Instagram but we will verify and specify it in the article. We will use the full name of the NRA if it was not identified earlier the article, but I believe it was.

There is no particular order for the social media platforms, but we would be open to changing it around based on effectiveness or follower count.

Yes, we can find more examples of the tweets from the Twitter account based on the different cities that they were based in.

Yes we were saying it was mostly the celebrities that drove Instagram popularity or the movement, but we can make that more clear. I think it is a good idea to reference them to their wikipedia pages. Thanks for the feedback on the grammar, we will look into it.

We can specify an example of what we meant by how Snapchat was used to gain momentum.