User:Seburr/Elsie Widdowson/Sschriber Peer Review

LEAD: The lead has been changed to add Sara's additional comments. I think the lead does a good job of describing her main contribution. I would be curious to know if there are any other key contributions she has made that could also be briefly listed here. The lead does cover most of the topics, maybe include something about an honor she received for her work. All info in lead is in rest of article. The lead is also very concise, not much to change here, maybe add one more sentence if applicable.

CONTENT: all content in the middle paragraphs is very relevant to the scientists career. I think her work with her partner is actually a good length because that seems to be her main accomplishment. If applicable, maybe add more to her legacy if there is anything else noteworthy that doesn't restate paragraph on her work with partner. No missing content.

TONE: neutral tone is present and consistent throughout. Only note is the title "legacy" may sound persuasive meaning that the stuff below is very important, I think its fine, but you could say something like "awards and honors."

SOURCES: all cited material looks legit and coming from non biased publications/webpages that are just explaining what she did. I think you may want to cite more in the McCance and Widdowson section if possible.

ORGANIZATION: organization looks standard for wiki and easy to follow. No suggestions.

ADDITIONS: I think your added content is helpful in contextualizing her history more and fixing and rewording things. I only would say add some more to the into to cover the other sections.

IMAGES: looks good and high quality images.

the article looks better with your suggestions only real work on the intro could be beneficial.

General info
Sara Burr
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