User:Secrettoaster/Qasr al-Hayr al-Gharbi/Ccreadingtime Peer Review

General info
Secrettoaster
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Secrettoaster/Qasr_al-Hayr_al-Gharbi?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Qasr al-Hayr al-Gharbi

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead: Although the information added may be correct with the provided two sources, it is important to remember we have to make sure we are confident about the information that we are adding. Otherwise I see why the changes are so small, the lead already provided in this article is fairly accurate and sustains the readers attention without babbling on about things that do not matter

Content: The content of the article, as limited as it is, is perfect for a fair explanation as to what the Qasr al-Hayr al-Gharbi is, contains factual information, resources to back up the claims, and contains information about its current status. There are no equity problems to be spotted within the content of this article. If there were a change I would ask of, It would be to elaborate more on the caravanserai in this desert castle, as these caravanserai's were extremely important to islamic culture.

Tone and Balance: The only bias that can be found is a rather small bias, that states that "It is one of the most luxurious examples of a desert palace." yet this is followed up by a reliable source, if anything, this could be worded differently. There is no biased information being added to the claims, and nothing is persuading the reader to think one thing over the other.

Sources and References: Not only do the links in the article before editing work, but the links added by the student are from primary sources and address many different attitudes towards Islamic culture, adding a variety of possible information to allow clarification in this article.

Organization: The added content from the student seems as if it will add a lot of much needed information to the article they are working on. Not only is it grammatically accurate and not biased, it also gives a little more context into the Islamic world of Art in terms of this caravanserai. As the student adds more information, they are slowly becoming the reason that this article is actually sectioned into understandable pieces and parts.

images and media: it seems the student wants to add a piece of media, yet there has been no choice for this to be viewed on the draft. However the images already used in the article are relavent and visually appealing

Overall Impressions: this is a very short article with a lot of information proving to be extremely hard to gather. With this being said, it is really exciting to see information not only be clarified, but sorted in a way that allows a new reader to approach this information in a ordered fashion. I think the additions the student is making to the article are relevant and helpful for the academic community. If there were any Changes I would personally make, it would be to add a bit more context into the lead, and immediately add the "figures and artwork" section they are working on into the live article because it is an extremely good piece of information