User:Sedonap/Sweatshop-free/Mackenziebrumbaugh Peer Review

Peer review
This is where you will complete your peer review exercise. Please use the following template to fill out your review.

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing? Sedonap
 * Link to draft you're reviewing: Sweatshop-free

Lead
Guiding questions:


 * Has the Lead been updated to reflect the new content added by your peer?
 * N/A
 * Does the Lead include an introductory sentence that concisely and clearly describes the article's topic?
 * Does the Lead include a brief description of the article's major sections?
 * Does the Lead include information that is not present in the article?
 * Is the Lead concise or is it overly detailed?

Content
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added relevant to the topic?
 * yes
 * Is the content added up-to-date?
 * yes
 * Is there content that is missing or content that does not belong?
 * no

Content evaluation
I think what you wrote was really great and gave a good overview of the start of activism for the sweatshop-free movement. I think adding more of the history of activism would be really great and would uplift the section.

Tone and Balance
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added neutral?
 * yes, for the most part
 * Are there any claims that appear heavily biased toward a particular position?
 * The only claim made that I could see being a slight issue is the phrase "spawned a movement that would change the way Americans view Consumerism"
 * It seems somewhat opinionated and people could probably refute it if they wanted to be picky
 * Are there viewpoints that are overrepresented, or underrepresented?
 * nope
 * Does the content added attempt to persuade the reader in favor of one position or away from another?
 * nope

Tone and balance evaluation
Except for that one phrase, the content is good and neutral.

Sources and References
Guiding questions:


 * Is all new content backed up by a reliable secondary source of information?
 * Are the sources thorough - i.e. Do they reflect the available literature on the topic?
 * Are the sources current?
 * Check a few links. Do they work?

Sources and references evaluation
I don't see any reference links attached to what you wrote, and there were definitely some claims you made that need references, but I'm assuming you haven't put them in yet!

Organization
Guiding questions:


 * Is the content added well-written - i.e. Is it concise, clear, and easy to read?
 * yes
 * Does the content added have any grammatical or spelling errors?
 * In the second sentence of the intro to activism, you capitalized "consumerism" and personally, I don't think it needs to be capitalized.
 * Is the content added well-organized - i.e. broken down into sections that reflect the major points of the topic?
 * yes

Images and Media
Guiding questions: If your peer added images or media


 * Does the article include images that enhance understanding of the topic?
 * Are images well-captioned?
 * Do all images adhere to Wikipedia's copyright regulations?
 * Are the images laid out in a visually appealing way?

For New Articles Only
If the draft you're reviewing is a new article, consider the following in addition to the above.


 * Does the article meet Wikipedia's Notability requirements - i.e. Is the article supported by 2-3 reliable secondary sources independent of the subject?
 * How exhaustive is the list of sources? Does it accurately represent all available literature on the subject?
 * Does the article follow the patterns of other similar articles - i.e. contain any necessary infoboxes, section headings, and any other features contained within similar articles?
 * Does the article link to other articles so it is more discoverable?

Overall impressions
Guiding questions:


 * Has the content added improved the overall quality of the article - i.e. Is the article more complete?
 * What are the strengths of the content added?
 * How can the content added be improved?

Overall evaluation
I think that what you have added so far has contributed well to the article, but I still think a lot more of the history can be added and make the section on activism really great. Overall, I think it is a good start! :)