User:Selenalam5/Lake Coeur d'Alene/Flowerflee Peer Review

General info
Selenalam5
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Selenalam5/Lake_Coeur_d%27Alene?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Lake Coeur d'Alene

Evaluate the drafted changes
-I would reread the article out loud since there are a lot of typos and grammatical errors currently. There seem to be a lot of run on sentences, incomplete sentences, and extra/duplicate words.

-I would break your article into sections with headers. Some could be "Native Aquatic Life," "Course," "History," "Culture," "Watershed," "Water Quality Legislature," etc.

-I would add how you plan to incorporate the information already in the existing Wikipedia page. Maybe that will help you figure out how your information could fit into different sections.

-You need to make a reference list still (use the " button at the top).

-I would rewrite this article in more of an neutral academic voice. It sounds like almost like an opinionated essay right now. In this kind of assignment I think we are looking for more concise writing.

-The article seems to discuss the Native American tribe overseeing the lake more than the lake itself. I think some of this can be condensed into a sentence or two. For example, in your second paragraph there are a few sentences in the middle that sound a bit repetitive. Some discussion on the Native American influence is great, but the article should be more centered around the lake overall. However, if you were supposed to just add information on the Native American influence, since the current Wikipedia article is pretty robust, then it sounds good just break it all into one section and condense it down a bit.