User:Selenalam5/Lake Coeur d'Alene/Kadekeys Peer Review

General info
User:Selenalam5
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Selenalam5/Lake Coeur d'Alene
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Lake Coeur d'Alene

Evaluate the drafted changes

 * The formatting is not that of a Wikipedia page, it's more of an essay the way it is. Try looking at the current Lake Coeur d'Alene page and seeing what new information or sections could be added to improve the existing article, instead of making a new article altogether.
 * On that note, the 'References' tab is functioning essentially as a bibliography right now. There's a page for that. On a Wikipedia article, the references section will build itself, as long as you go in and add your sources when prompted (you will be prompted to do so when inserting a citation).
 * A good amount of the information you have is useful and missing from the current Lake Coeur d'Alene article, so that's pretty good.
 * I would suggest running the essay through a grammar checker, and adding punctuation/breaking up sentences. Currently there are a lot of run-on sentences and grammatical issues. The tone is also that of a persuasive essay, which does not follow the neutral tone, but that's not the most pressing issue at the moment.
 * The statements on the native tribes are not super correlated, and a few of them seem to glorify Native Americans' relationships with the land in a way that perpetuates a stereotype. The discussion on the natives can also easily be placed into one section (titled "Schitsu’umsh Involvement" or something)
 * In terms of sources, some of them are decent. However, one of them is listed twice, and links to a storymap. A storymap is a persuasive multimedia presentation, which has its sources cited at the end. This map would have been a good place to get sources from, but it is not a valid Wikipedia source.
 * You also used a CDA Press article as a source(which is not neutral; it's an opinionated article from a newspaper, meaning it lacks neutrality, and is not meant to be used as a source). However, I also noticed that some of the segments on your draft seem to be copy-pasted from this article with some words and phrases swapped around(most noticeably the sentence starting with "Before European influence"). This is known to be plagiarism according to our trainings, under the name 'Close Paraphrasing'. I'm going to assume that this is why the syntax for much of the article feels off - much of it has been edited from its ideal phrasing to avoid direct plagiarism.
 * You cited the Wikipedia page for the Coeur d'Alene People (specifically the two paragraphs on their culture, which lack citations). Citing pages within Wikipedia creates a citation ouroboros.