User:Seligmanns/sandbox

Article Evaluation:

- Jimmy Wales

"As he grew up and learned to read, it became an object of reverence"

This to me seems to more opinion based and less of a fact about him. It is drawing conclusions on how Wales felt about his encyclopedia.

The rest of the article seems factual and correct.

- History of books

I don't see a citation for the first piece of the article about what books originated as

"The history of books starts with the development of writing, and various other inventions such as paper and printing, and continues through to the modern day business of book printing. The earliest history of books actually predates what would conventionally be called "books" today and begins with tablets, scrolls, and sheets of papyrus. Then hand-bound, expensive, and elaborate books known as codices appeared. These gave way to press-printed volumes and eventually lead to the mass printed tomes prevalent today. Contemporary books may even have no physical presence with the advent of the e-book."

The article seems unbiased and factual.

Possible Articles

Drone Strikes

- needs more sources

-not representative of all view points

Electric Forest

-more information about the festival itself could be added

-the article talks most just about the artist that have attended the events

The Humane Society of the United States

-article is lengthy

-citations need review

-article contradicts itself saying the humane society doesn't run any local animal care facilities but it also says they have 5 animal sanctuaries throughout the U.S

Drone Strike[edit]
"Drone strikes are commonly used to destroy buildings and vehicles"

-Needs citation

"This extrajudicial method of killing is considered highly controversial"

-Not a fact, the wording could be changed to be less biased

-The article needs more sources because it the information on it is mostly from one source

-More could be added for drone strikes by the United States

-Information could possibly added about how drone strikes are administrated and who usually does them

-There is no content on this page for civilians killed by drone strikes, I think this information would help inform readers more about the fatalities of drone strikes

Bibliography

Franke, Ulrike Esther. "Drones, drone strikes, and us policy: the politics of unmanned aerial vehicles." Parameters, Spring 2014, p. 121+. Academic OneFile, http://link.galegroup.com.cod.idm.oclc.org/apps/doc/A372883765/AONE?u=cod_lrc&sid=AONE&xid=f0981d55. Accessed 18 Apr. 2018.

Ashraf, Ali. "U.S. DRONE STRIKES IN PAKISTAN: INCREASING TRENDS, QUESTIONABLE LEGITIMACY, AND THE ISSUE OF TACIT COOPERATION." Pakistan Journal of International Relations, vol. 2, no. 1, 2010. Academic OneFile, http://link.galegroup.com.cod.idm.oclc.org/apps/doc/A250974646/AONE?u=cod_lrc&sid=AONE&xid=302dca41. Accessed 18 Apr. 2018.

Lerner, Ben. "Drones and Targeted Killings: Ethics, Law, Politics." Parameters, Autumn 2015, p. 118+. Academic OneFile, http://link.galegroup.com.cod.idm.oclc.org/apps/doc/A445750496/AONE?u=cod_lrc&sid=AONE&xid=c8d9cd9b. Accessed 18 Apr. 2018.

http://go.galegroup.com/ps/retrieve.do?tabID=T002&resultListType=RESULT_LIST&searchResultsType=SingleTab&searchType=AdvancedSearchForm&currentPosition=34&docId=GALE%7CA404037153&docType=Article&sort=Relevance&contentSegment=&prodId=AONE&contentSet=GALE%7CA404037153&searchId=R3&userGroupName=cod_lrc&inPS=true The Constitution follows the drone: targeted killings, legal constraints, and judicial safeguards

Changes to the article

"Drone strikes are commonly used to destroy buildings and vehicles.[citation needed] However, they are also used for targeted killings. This extrajudicial method of killing is considered highly controversial"

I can't find a reliable source for the part of the sentence about drones and vehicles so I am going to change it and delete that part of the paragraph. I think a different sentence should be added about what drones are used for.

"Drones--unmanned, remotely piloted, aerial vehicles, short UAVs--are now used by the armed forces of approximately 70 countries around the world. The club of armed UAV holders remains more exclusive; for the moment, its members only include Israel, the United Kingdom, the United States, and most likely China and Iran. This situation, however, is likely to change sooner rather than later with many countries considering the procurement of armed drones"

I think this part of the source I found would contribute useful information to the article. I'm going to reword it and add it as:

Drones or UAVs, are used by about 70 countries. Only a few countries have started to use armed drones, these countries are Israel, the United Kingdom, the United States.

"the United States will continue to look to deployment of unmanned aerial vehicles (drones) as a valuable counterterrorism tool, enabling the use of precise lethal force with comparatively little risk to non-combatants on the ground, and zero risk of American casualties. While drones have undoubtedly provided the American warfighter with significant tactical advantage over an asymmetric enemy that operates without legal or moral constraint, their prominence in the targeted killing component of U.S. counterterrorism efforts has ignited substantial debate over the legality and advisability of using such weapons for this purpose, particularly away from the so-called "hot" battlefields of Afghanistan and Iraq"

This source offers some information on how and why the United States use drone strikes and would be useful for the article's section about drone strikes by the United States. I'm going to reword part of it and add it as:

In the United States drone strikes are used to lessen the amount of casualties since there isn't a person that has to physically fight in combat. Being able to send drones to fight reduces the amount of American lives lost substantially.

"Reportedly, more drone strikes were carried out in President Barack Obama's first year in office than in the previous eight years combined under George W. Bush, and 2010 has almost doubled the pace of 2009"

This source gives information on the increased use of drone strikes in recent years.

I am going to reword it and add it as:

The United States had increased the use of drone strikes under President Barack Obama significantly. "(M)ore drone strikes were carried out in President Barack Obama's first year in office than in the previous eight years combined under George W. Bush"