User:Sellarsjp/Newbury Volcanic Complex/Aronsonhd19972021 Peer Review

Whose work are you reviewing?

Sellarsjp

Link to draft you're reviewing

.  User:Sellarsjp/Newbury Volcanic Complex

Link to current version of the article:

User:Sellarsjp/Newbury Volcanic Complex/Aronsonhd19972021 Peer Review

Evaluate the draft:

CONTENT:

- I think your contents is well organized for the sections you want to explain about.

- Yes, the content the user used for their rock unit is up to date and relevant to that we are studying in class.

- You are geologic background is good! I would maybe add a little more or add a map so viewers can where the rock uit is visually.

- great job dividing the contents up though, it makes it easier to follow!

GRAMMER

- Under "member 3" i think it would sound better if you said "30 meter or more" instead of 30 or more meters"

-the second sentence in "member 3" ay sound better as "The original minerals the formed this section..."

- member 4 should have "0 m to 52 m" the first "m" is missing (there are other areas where you could add the "m" to the first number as well like in member 6 and 7

- For member 8, is it relevant to provide any info on the glacier that deposited the till? if it is not then scratch that but i figured id point it out incase you do want to add info about that.

- the last sentence in member 8 refers to "this member more than it needs to i think. The last part in the sentence could be erased to flow better.

IMAGES:

- I do think more pictures could have been added. i would add a map, a thin section (if possible), and maybe a picture of the fossils if any are available.

SOURCES:

- I would add more sources, i only see 1 source for this article so far an i belive 5 total are required for the assign.

- Also the source link for your source does not work, it takes me to an unloadable page.

STRENGTHS

- the strengths your article has is that there are many members that provide great info for the viewer, you have very descriptive rock types which is helpful to the viewer.

- other than those things i pointed out, your article is good and organized! Just take a look at what i commented and your article should be very good!!