User:Semaj Martin/Sterilization of Latinas/Drojasra Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Elena (Equijas)


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Semaj%20Martin/Sterilization_of_Latinas?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)

Evaluate the drafted changes
(Compose a detailed peer review here, considering each of the key aspects listed above if it is relevant. Consider the guiding questions, and check out the examples of what feedback looks like.)

Elena's Review

Lead:

The lead provides an adequate introduction for the her contributions to the sterilization of Latina Women Wiki Article. She includes a brief introduction of the No Mas Bebes film to let the readers know that women in Los Angeles faced negative experiences in regards to their health -- they were all sterilized when they did not know it would be long-term and irreversible or against their consent. She talks about Guadalupe Acosta because she will focus on that. And she also mentions the California Sterilization Law of 1909 because it was the first law that ever permitted people in power at hospitals to sterilize women to keep the population from growing.

Lead is concise and specific; the sub headings are mentioned -- it is organized.

I don't really see an introduction sentence in the lead, but there aren't any subjects that aren't talked about in the content body. However, in the end she says compulsory sterilization was a public health strategy that would breed out undesirable effects from the population.

CONTENT:

content is up to date ; all sources that are hyperlinked are clickable and recent. As far as equity gaps, there is information that educates readers on the situation regarding women and reproductive rights for a minority group such as Latina Women.

Tone and Balance:

Everything for each sub heading topic is neutral and does not make an argument of the topic, instead she makes sure to mention her areas of research and give information. There are no areas of underrepresentation or over representation.

Sources: all sources seem credible and are from good sources; the links work and they are provided where needed if she mentions quotes or information from the movie and law. Sources are pretty diverse but she could add more sources because she only has one per topic.

images- there are no images provided

Content: it is easy to read and; no grammatical errors in the way of obscuring meaning in the article; strengths of the content I feel are the statistics and the quotes of Guadalupe Acosta.

her contributions to the article add more of the context that is needed to understand where the sterilization of Latina Women came to be. And the content added can be improved with some images if possible. It would add more illustrations to the despair of these women and show more of the impact they faced.