User:Semm321/Lobisomem/TheRealMithrandir Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Semm321


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Semm321/Lobisomem?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lobisomem

Evaluate the drafted changes
Hello, this is a peer review of the published wikipedia article.

Firstly, the lead is to the point and gives a good overview. It gives context (folklore), region (South America), and a brief telling of what this creature is believed to be. Secondly, the following section gives the three ways that a human can turn into one of these creatures. In this section, I might recommend getting rid of the numbering and making it into one paragraph. From the point “it is also said…” all the way to, “regardless if the moon is full or not.” I think this would make it more uniform and it would appear more academic. Also, the first two claims do not have sources. Thirdly, the second to last paragraph is very vague. It says, “some say” and “others say,” but it does not specify who is saying these things and whether they are reliable. If you can find sources for these claims, excellent! If not, I would suggest removing that paragraph altogether. Lastly, I believe the last paragraph should have a source. Also, in the hopes of expanding the article, you may want to start separating it into sections. Perhaps the last paragraph should be under Etymology. Additionally, if you could find any information on when this mythical creature was believed in and include specificity in which people groups believed it, that might be helpful. You have a very promising article to add to. Happy researching!