User:Serenity Siren/Sleep disorder/Sdmlas Peer Review

General info
Serenity Siren
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Serenity%20Siren/Sleep_disorder?veaction=edit&preload=Template:Dashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Sleep disorder

Evaluate the drafted changes
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The lead section has a lot of information in it that I feel could be condensed or moved to different sections. It simply needs to introduce what the article is about instead of going into such detail about it since that is what the rest of the article will be doing. There is a list of conditions plus a list of types that could be combined because some of the same things are repeated in both sections. The list of causes is necessary but it is a little difficult to follow so I feel like it could be formatted better. Each section that outlines sleep disorders with a different disease is fine but the other diseases need to be introduced first. The treatment section first list 4 categories so I think the following sub-sections should be in the specific order that those are listed and separated into those categories to make it easier to follow. The effects of untreated sleep disorders could be moved to be included in treatment or have its own section with sub-sections.