User:Serenity Siren/Sleep disorder/Spenn7 Peer Review

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User:Serenity Siren/Sleep disorder/Spenn7 Peer Review
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 * User:Serenity Siren/Sleep disorder
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Sleep disorder::Evaluate the drafted changes

The article on sleep disorders (Sleep disorder), clearly described what sleep disorders are, and stated/gave many examples of sleep disorders/conditions. The section you chose to add onto fits the topic and is relevant, because obstructive sleep apnea (OSA) is one of the conditions talked about in the article. The content is also very neutral, with extensive data and facts listed on the condition, which makes it impossible to be biased. The sentences added into this section is also completely unbiased because it is based on fact, and the source it is from is very strong. Although one sentence might not be relevant to the topic, (obesity in the abdomen being harmful to the upper respiratory system), I found the rest of your addition to be relevant, and improved the overall quality of the article. It improved it because it added more facts that stayed on topic, and gave the readers more insight and knowledge on obstructive sleep apnea.