User:Serg2002/Groundwater pollution/AndrewTRTL23 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

I am reviewing Sergio's work


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Serg2002/Groundwater pollution


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Groundwater pollution

Evaluate the drafted changes
I only see one draft change so I will review that.

I like the flow of the writing here. This does feel neutral in theory. There are a few things that I would change and that is mainly in the sentences. There are times where you can delete words because they are not necessary. Example: when you state, "underground injection activities that would endanger underground drinking sources such as groundwater." you can delete "such as groundwater" because you have already stated that the drinking sources is underwater. The next thing I would change is the Indian government example. This example, compared to the place where you selected to edit, is under the United States not India. If this change is in another section, please state it. I don't think this part needs to be in this area so I would say, "do not add it in that section." Other than those couple of changes, you can make your own small changes to each sentence. Overall, I like this bit of information it was nice.