User:Serina Jack/Megarian decree/CDD2112 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Serina Jack


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Serina%20Jack/Megarian_decree?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Megarian Decree

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead

Good addition of sources at the end of the lead, where there was already info, but was missing sources.

Content

I assume you are not changing the title of "Background" (the original article) to "Article Body" (the draft). If you are, I would recommend not, as it is not very formal.

Once again, good addition of sources throughout the different sections of the article that were lacking in the original.

In the section, "Significance", I really liked the clarification that Aristophanes' plays were comedic and may not be historically accurate. Someone who is unfamiliar with Aristophanes may not know that these were comedic plays so the addition was needed.

I would recommend adding "BC" to the sentence in the "Significance" section when talking about the rebellion of Samos in 440. It seems more formal and helps someone who is unfamiliar with the time period.

I would recommend adding sources to the last paragraph. I see the source goes to a video of Donald Kagan, I'm curious as to if there are articles out there that could also help back this.

I am guessing that the section "De Ste. Croix's Revisionist Interpretation" is going to be left on the article, but you are just not editing it. If you are taking it out, I would recommend leaving it as it gives more information on the decree itself.

Sources and References

Like I have mentioned above, the sources you have added throughout the article are beneficial. They all add sources to previous statements that lacked sources or they added additional sources to statements that may have only had one source.

I would recommend trying to find more sources if possible. However, I understand that it can be difficult to find reliable sources as this is something I have struggled with.

Images and Media

The additions of the two maps showing Megara as well as the different dialects during the Classical Period are great additions for someone who is unfamiliar with the different areas and cities of this time period. The image of the sculpture of Pericles was also a good addition since he played a role in the Megarian Decree. (It made me realize that I should do this for my article, as I wasn't quite sure what images to add.)