User:Serina Jack/Megarian decree/Footballer 28 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Serina Jack


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Serina%20Jack/Megarian_decree?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Megarian Decree

Evaluate the drafted changes
I don't understand why you took out the duplicate sourcing. Perhaps I'm just missing something, but I thought its purpose in the original article was to just recite the same source. I feel as though the material should still be cited, but you can make a new citation if you want to be more accurate about where in the same text these quotes come from.

I like the sentence you added under "significance" clarifying the reliability of plays as a historical source.

I really like the pictures added. I think they are a nice addition to give the reader visual context for this topic.

As for the last paragraph about De Ste. Croix, I wonder about having his title be a "revisionist historian." I briefly skimmed the article describing what that means to Wiki, and it seemed like they don't paint revisionists in a particularly bad light. However, that term has a usually negative context surrounding it in most uses so I wonder if it isn't the most neutral way to describe him. Perhaps that is just my opinion and you and others wouldn't see it that way, but I just wanted to put it out there as food for thought.

You have a nice addition of both primary and secondary sources added, that's very good!

Overall, I think this is a great start. I think you have made some good source and media contributions! I might focus next on adding some more detail in any place you see that you can. The article is not very long, and while it is not a super complex topic, I'm sure you can find more things to contribute to the knowledge it contains!