User:Serinali/Politics of China/Varshanekkanti Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Serinali


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Serinali/Politics_of_China?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Politics of China

Evaluate the drafted changes
Content: I really liked that you chose to focus on NGOs with your content! That is definitely something that was not touched on in the main article and I think it adds a really valuable perspective on the business sphere and the role of the government in addressing social issues. I found the case studies to be very interesting to read about and learning about tangible missionary work that has been done by various organizations helped me ground the concepts in rael examples. One area that could be expanded upon in the content is actually talking about some of the dominant NGOs in China and the work that they have done, along with the barriers they have faced in their growth over time.

Tone and Balance: The tone is unbiased/neutral throughout.

Sources and References: There is a strong assortment of sources that were used for the content. One thing to adapt about your content is to cite sources using the WIkipedia footnote formatting with insert citation as opposed to using the author/page number format for citations. Also, I really liked how the content on NGOs predominantly was based on studies from universities or case studies done by scholars in the field. Make sure to insert citations at the bottom so that they show up under references, but overall the content is so strong!

Organization: The organization was strong throughout the text. One thing to consider would be integrating the examples of different NGOs and the work that they have done into the discussion about the history of NGOs and the different policies around that. Using this format of organization might be easier to follow from the POV of the audience as opposed to consolidating all the NGO examples at the end.

Overall impressions: Overall, I really liked the content that you decided to focus on in your article. I think it adds a really unique perspective to the main article. Great work!