User:Serineyahya/Evolution of the brain/MRawlings73 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Serineyahya


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Serineyahya/Evolution of the brain - Wikipedia


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Evolution of the brain - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
-- Content: Content is vague and could use more information added that is related to the topic. Source material appears sound, but there are no endnote links available to test.

-- Tone & Balance: There isn't enough content to determine tone or balance yet, however I would elaborate your meaning behind this sentence. "... was the start of something big as it was the start of a big shift in science..." What was big? What was the "big shift?"

-- Overall Impressions: Overall there is a point in the right direction, however there is not enough content to review. The article, itself could use content added to the "Evolution of the Human Brain," "Role of Embryology," and "Genetic" sections. These are places that will benefit with content expansion. Ex. the "Evolution of the Human Brain" seems to lack content related to human brain evolution after Homo erectus.