User:Serineyahya/Evolution of the brain/Rdano001 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Serineyahya


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Serineyahya/Evolution_of_the_brain?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Evolution of the brain
 * Evolution of the brain

Evaluate the drafted changes
peer review:

- "something big" is a bit vague.

- I'm a little confused as to how the origin of the homo genus was an early part of scientific evolution

- I think your idea for a new section is interesting but I'm not entirely sure that it is connected to the focus of the article. be sure to connect your points back to "evolution of human intelligence"

- Suggestions for sections to improve in the article:

- ZEB2: reword to be less technical and explain its importance/ what it does

- NOVA1: reword to be less technical and explain its importance/ what it does

- Randomizing access and scaling brains up: reword to be less technical

- Update and expand upon the intro paragraph to better match the information in the rest of the article.