User:Serkatet/Lost-wax casting/Sunfloweryellow007 Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Serkatet


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Serkatet/Lost-wax_casting?preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Lost-wax casting

Evaluate the drafted changes
Make sure to change what you update in the lead, and not just the body! Additionally, it seems like there are a lot of named example with not much in the way of explanations about why they are important, and so that is definitely a place in which you could narrow down to the important parts and then expand on them. I feel as though the single block of text is not very conductive to reading, and so breaking it up might be helpful if you do keep it long, which I do not see as as much of a problem (like South Asia). I do like your ideas as to how to expand. However, maybe talking about who made these sculptures in Ancient Greece, and how we know. Overall, I think this is headed in the right direction! I really like your new picture, and the sources seem helpful. Underwater archaeology, while this is an older source, can tell us a lot due to preservation, and I think this is an important thing to talk about.