User:Seskaff/Reforestation/Iisabellasanch Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Seskaff


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Seskaff/Reforestation
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Reforestation

Evaluate the drafted changes
 Content: 

The content added- a section on reforestation efforts and deforestation in Peru- is relevant to the topic: Reforestation. The content added is up-to-date, with a peer-reviewed source from 2016 and another source from 2020-2021- and provides background information on deforestation in Peru and why plans to protect the Amazon forest have generally failed. This background on deforestation also addresses the exploitation of indigenous and rural communities by people in power.

 Tone and Balance: 

While the majority of the content added is neutral and unbiased, one sentence in particular is a bit biased. Rather than explicitly saying "A history of political turmoil and the government's inability to enforce environmental regulations has led to the degradation of the forest and environment in Peru," perhaps a more objective stance on this issue would be more neutral. Changing "the government's inability" to a phrase less direct, for example, would cultivate an unbiased and balanced tone.

 Sources and References: 

The content added is backed by two current sources- one from EcoSwell Brief (2020-2021) and the other from an author named Damnote (2016). While these sources are cited throughout the Peru section, they are not cited under the References section. I, thus, cannot check the credibility or content of these sources; their links are not provided. In addition, the second paragraph under the Peru section does not have any sources cited- so it could be flagged for plagiarism.

 Organization: 

The content added is written well and does not contain any spelling or grammatical errors. My only suggestion would be to split up the first paragraph into two paragraphs- one on deforestation and another on the government's response. This would make it much easier to understand/process.

 Overall Impressions: 

By adding a section on reforestation efforts and deforestation in Peru, the quality of the article improves and spans a larger geography. I especially liked how you integrated data into your paragraphs- it made the content you were adding much more reliable and credible. My only suggestion would be to add a source to your last paragraph, and cite your sources under the References section so people can access them. Other than that, great job!