User:Sfatima 12/Comparison of bipolar disorder and schizophrenia/Snqadri Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sfatima12


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/User:Sfatima%2012/Comparison_of_bipolar_disorder_and_schizophrenia?veaction=edit&preload=Template%3ADashboard.wikiedu.org_draft_template


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Comparison of bipolar disorder and schizophrenia

Evaluate the drafted changes
I would like you to know first of all, that I tried my very best to give you any helpful feedback I could come up with to the best of my ability. However, I think so far you have are right on track and honestly, probably exceeding with your revisions in comparison to what I've seen so far. The information you have added to the first paragraph is a great lead into the topic as a whole and better ties together the two subjects than the existing article on it. It is relevant, neutral, and helpful too with seeing how the two disorders are involved. The only critique I have so far is that I think you can edit the use of transitional words, particularly at the beginning of your sentences. I think without them, the information might not flow as well, but it will be more "matter of fact" and to the point which is important in scientific articles like these.

I think you did a great job with finding pertinent information to add, all of your links work, and the references themselves are credible and up to par with wikipedia guidelines. I did not note any biases and I like how you worded the final sentence to highlight that there are differing views considering the possible treatments, but you still kept it as neutral as possible.