User:Sh1539/Genetic discrimination/Rbullied Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Sh1539, Meghanmcq, Mesmith017


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Sh1539/Genetic discrimination


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * Genetic discrimination

Evaluate the drafted changes
I thought that the added and edited sections nicely filled in areas the original article was lacking. The section on COVID-19 in particular felt relevant and timely. The tone may be improved by decreasing the use of words such as 'ultimately' or 'overall'; occasionally the use of such words decreased how objective the information read, despite the information actually being informative and objective. The draft appears neutral and unbiased, and the included viewpoints seem adequately represented. Citations appear recent, to date, and reliable. Depending on the placement of new sections in the existing published page, it may be helpful to the reader to include sub-headings within sections for easier reading.

Questions:

- Is there a citation for the sentence(s) starting "However, this does not necessarily mean that the intentions of DTC companies are...."? (Last paragraph of Direct-to-consumer genetic testing).

- Confusing sentence/typo starting "While may be statistical evidence of genetic differences between human populations—such as mutations..." (First paragraph of Race and Genetic Discrimination)

-Is there a citation for the sentence starting "Misuse of genetic data creates long-lasting distrust towards the medical community..."? (Third paragraph of Race and Genetic Discrimination)