User:Shae Chand/The Impact of Climate Change on the Agricultural Industry/Elysetnguyen Peer Review

General info

 * Whose work are you reviewing?

Shae Chand


 * Link to draft you're reviewing
 * User:Shae Chand/The Impact of Climate Change on the Agricultural Industry


 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists)
 * User:Shae Chand/The Impact of Climate Change on the Agricultural Industry

Evaluate the drafted changes
Lead


 * 1) The lead in this article is not clear. Try adding one to make the content more clear and easy to read.
 * 2) There does seem to be an introductory sentence. It’s about how climate change has become a health hazard which clearly describes the article’s topic.
 * 3) There’s no lead in this article and no brief description. Adding a brief description will help your article a lot. Maybe you could lead up to talking about the cyanobacteria instead of bringing it up right away, because people may not understand the information behind it.
 * 4) There’s no clear lead.
 * 5) There’s no lead included. Definitely try adding a clear lead. You could start with something more general and broad, then lead up to talking about cardiovascular diseases once you’ve had some sort of introduction.

Content


 * 1) The content added is relevant because it ties into and connects to the agricultural industry.  They’re all health effects and effects on the environment that affect farm workers.
 * 2) The content seems to be up to date
 * 3) I think the content you have so far is good
 * 4) This does not deal with equity gaps. It’s focused more on the facts behind how climate changes affect agriculture.

Tone and balance


 * 1) The content seems neutral.
 * 2) The claim is that climate change affects agriculture. Although, it doesn’t seem biased.
 * 3) I think the viewpoints are represented well. The whole article is supposed to be about how climate change affects agriculture, and you’ve provided information to support that.
 * 4) The content doesn’t seem to be persuasive, it mostly remains factual and neutral.

Sources and References

There are no sources added at all. Although your information seems reliable and factual, you should definitely add where you got your information so that your article is credible.

Organization


 * 1) The way the content is written is fine. It’s concise which is good, I would just focus on organizing it better.
 * 2) There are a few misused words. Wikipedia can help you fix them.
 * 3) The content added could be improved. I would try adding more transition words. You’re backing up your claim that climate change affects agriculture well, but you seem to be talking about something different in each sentence. Try transitioning into different topics instead. Definitely try adding different sections as well.

Images and media


 * 1) There are no images included
 * 2) There are no captions included
 * 3) There are no images included
 * 4) There are no images included

For new articles only


 * 1) The article doesn’t meet the notability requirements because there are no sources added. You should definitely add sources so that your article is reliable and readers know where your information is coming from.
 * 2) There are no list of sources (once again, you should add them)
 * 3) The pattern of the article needs to be organized better. Try adding a lead, intro, and sub sections to create a better flow of information.
 * No

Overall impressions


 * 1) The quality of the article is fine. I like how the information provided backs up the claim that climate change is affecting agriculture, just try organizing better and adding sources. That will add more quality and credibility to your article.
 * 2) The strength of this article is that everything connects and makes sense together.


 * 1) I think something you could add that would make your article strong is how farmers can reduce their work hours. That would affect all production and the money they need. I think this could be seen as a counter argument which will strengthen your article.