User:Shakedownstreet120/Pisa Griffin/Eng215 Peer Review

Hi There!

The article is overall very well written and a few additions would make it great! Please see some suggestions below, organized as the template suggests :).

Lead

I would suggest adding a sentence that helps to portray the structure of the article. Otherwise, the lead is very suggestive of the content in the article and the a good summary.

Content

The content that you added does all seem to be good ideas! I would add a little more to the Mari Chan Lion comparison. I did a quick search and could not find a Wiki page so maybe this is something you want to expand upon a little. If you can find a page, I would suggest adding a link to it in your article.

Tone

I think your tone is on point with the assignment. Factual, not persuasive.

Content

The article is concise and clear while still giving a lot of information. I am not sure what you plan on adding, if anything but make sure it stays concise.

Overall, I think your article has benefited from these additions. Great work!

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