User:Shal613/Quantum biology/Johnskad Peer Review

General info
Shal613
 * Whose work are you reviewing?


 * Link to draft you're reviewing:User:Shal613/Quantum biology - Wikipedia
 * Link to the current version of the article (if it exists):Quantum biology - Wikipedia

Evaluate the drafted changes
The new intro sentence you added was good, it helps the flow a lot.

The second half of this sentence is a bit vague, maybe evaluate whether it needs to be there or how else you could express it: "An understanding of fundamental quantum interactions is important because they determine the properties of the next level of organization in biological systems."

Good decision removing that ETC paragraph, I agree it was unnecessary. I like the photosynthesis section addition you have drafted; it introduces the topic well in the context of quantum mechanical applications. There is a duplicate paragraph in there between the introduction and PPCs.

This sentence could be more clear with reorganization: "What has been primarily implicated as reflecting non-trivial quantum behaviors is the light reaction stage of photosynthesis."

This sentence is good, but the 'furthermore' introductory phrase doesn't make sense in context: "Furthermore, experiments with artificial dye molecules cast doubts on the interpretation that quantum effects last any longer than one hundred femtoseconds."

Your edits to the exisiting mitochondria paragraph helped the flow - good job.

Overall impressions
Your sandbox draft has a lot of really great information and is written quite well with good flow. I do think that it is a bit long-winded in sections, like in the chronological retelling of the PPC research history. While I think it's valuable to demonstrate how the ideas evolved, the focus should be on the current best supported model, so maybe shorten a bit of the other stuff. Another thing to maybe look at is the ending of the mitochondria section, it seems to trail off without fully fleshing out the idea of tunneling within the mitochondria. The membrane is said to be a potential energy barrier that can be overcome by adjusting its density, but we could use a sentence explaining why that is the case and why/how tunneling occurs escpecially in the mitochondria. Your refereces look good. Overall, it's looking really solid, keep it up.

Evaluate the drafted changes 2
"the reaction center complex mediates its oxidation and the reduction [of] the primary electron acceptor"

"Much like the electron transport chain of the mitochondria" I would add a link

"Mitochondria have been demonstrated to utilize quantum tunneling in its function as the powerhouse of eukaryotic cell." Grammar, have, its

The changes since last time to the mitochondria section are excellent, it reads very well.

Overall impressions 2
Overall, I was able to read through your changes with a lot more ease and understanding this time, it looks really well done. Other than those tiny grammar things, it looks ready to publish in my opinion, great work!